Metamorphosis: Pygmalion
Story source: Ovid's Metamorphoses, translated by Tony Kline (2000).
What I liked: - The overview at the beginning is key to having the reader understand what they are about to portray to the reader
- The intro is short, but provides the reader with a foundation
- Have in the intro key items that pertain to the story that may not be familiar to the reader
- Brief history lesson, but not to in depth
- This is a short read but captures many elements
- Capture the audience immediately with the introduction/background information
- I like the slight comparisons throughout the story
- Reasons are stated before the action, for example look at paragraph one where he talks about the daughter of Propoetus and then that serves as his reason to create the girl of Ivory
- The Venus festival was a good way to bring Venus into the story
- When writing the story: bring elements in, such that the reader is not confused by the sudden information
- Make sure there is a logical flow in the story
- Lots and lots of descriptive imagery - big fan, helps the readers visualize what is going on and actually feel as if they are right in the story seeing everything from their own eyes.
- Need to add links to words that may not be common to most readers
- There are details, but not as many to overpower the story in one area
- Make sure to be careful when including details that they are spread out in the story
Things I did not like as much:
- If there is a god/goddess, don't just have them grant the wish/prayer of the main character
- There needs to be some kind of explanation as to what were his/her actions that made them so fond of the main character
Otherwise the story was short but captured a range of topics... I tend to add much more fluff/unnecessary content in my stories, so a goal with this story assignment coming up is to keep the story short but meaningful.
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